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Here’s a hymn to welcome in the day
Heralding a summer’s early sway
And all the bulbs all coming in
To begin
The thrushes bleating battle with the wrens
Disrupts my reverie again
Pegging clothing on the line
Training jasmine how to vine
Up the arbor to your door
And more
You’re standing on the landing with the war
You shouldered all the night before
And once upon it
The yellow bonnets
Garland all the lawn
And you were waking
And day was breaking
A panoply of song
And summer comes to Springville Hill
A barony of ivy in the trees
Expanding out its empire by degrees
And all the branches burst to bloom
In the boom
Heaven sent this cardinal maroon
To decorate our living room
And years from now when this old light
Isn’t ambling anymore
Will I bring myself to write
“I give my best to Springville Hill”
6 comments:
first try at a haiku ... i went to metaphorical i think... have to work on that one... the form is there however lol... i think hehe
what about saying "my" instead of oh?
i originally had "Oh! Laughing city," ...im thinking maybe "our"... i dont like my though..... hmmm
I wish I can write haiku that's objective-- mine is quite sentimental...
I really love pixie dust ~.~
wow i cannot spell apparently... *too* metaphorical...
ok im gonna change "Oh laughing city!" to "oh! laughing city:" like Robert Hass' description of "oh!"... you would have had to have been there though...ermm... ill see if i can find his explanation somewhere... or remember it exactly... lol
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